Draft: Make airport waiting areas more comfortable

Airports should provide more quiet seating for families. Travellers often wait for a long time, and crowded chairs can make the experience frustrating. Mei noticed that several families had to sit on the floor near the gates. This is not fair! A simple survey of passengers could show how many people need extra seats. Adding quiet seating would help everyone feel calmer, so airport managers should consider this change.

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Airports should add more charging points becuase many travellers need to contact there families. The queues are long. Passengers could charge a phone while they wait, this would make the time more useful. Managers must act now

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