Story Feedback Practice Worksheet

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📝 Part 1: Understanding Feedback Elements

1. What should good story feedback focus on? (Check all that apply)

Authentic voice (sounds like the writer)

Clear setting description

Sentence structure variety

Correct punctuation and capitalisation

Consistent tense control

Only spelling mistakes

2. Which feedback sentence is most helpful?

"Your story is good."

"I loved how you described the view from Papamoa Hills, and your varied sentence lengths kept me engaged throughout."

"You made lots of mistakes."

✍️ Part 2: Practice Writing Feedback

Example Story Extract: "Me and my friend climbed papamoa hills yesterday it was really hot and we could see the beach from the top the view was amazing we took heaps of photos and then we went down again."

Example Feedback: "Your story captures an authentic voice and the Papamoa Hills setting is clear, but adding punctuation and varying your sentence lengths would make it even more engaging to read."

3. Read this story extract and write one helpful feedback sentence focusing on voice, setting, and sentence structure:

"The walk up Papamoa Hills was steep. Very steep. I was puffing. My legs hurt. But when I got to the top I saw the most beautiful view of the bay of plenty."

4. Write feedback for this extract, focusing on tense control and punctuation:

"Yesterday I climb Papamoa Hills with my family, we seen the ocean and it look so blue and peaceful I wish I can stay there forever."

5. Create your own one-sentence feedback for this extract about setting and voice:

"Papamoa Hills is a place where people go. I went there. It was okay. There were trees and stuff. The end."